A poet in me
This is my first attempt to write a poem. I know its very uncharacteristic, but yet...
Here we go....
"CONFUSED"
It feels worlds heavy
It feels aloof
Mind becomes void
When I miss you…
Where were you when I was broken?
Where were you when I was shaken?
Where were you when I needed you?
In search of your shoulder,
To rest my head,
To shed my concealed tears,
To cleanse the wounded heart
Never will fight with you
Never will upset you
Never will behave grumpy
I want you to believe me this time,
Just as you do every time
Lets be this the last time.
Your silence kills...
Wistful to hear you talk to me
Waiting to see you walk towards me
I stay alone here… for you
With all cherished memories
22 comments:
Great! Attempt Gowri! Carry on we want more: D
Words r good and expressive.The poem is interlaced with 'Love & Pain' from start to end. We want to know..
Who is that?
Who is that?
Who is that lucky girl?
These are every one's thought, but you gave the word structure.
Good work…...
Hai gowri
Nee oru GowriMuthu...
Nee oru Gowripeare
Nee oru GowriLee
ha ha just for fun..Dai but one day be ready to
write books..i will sponser u for publishing..cheer up..keep continue this..
unakulla pala vishayam olinju irukunu ipo thaan puriyuthu..
kandipa neee yaarayavathu love pani iruntha thaaan intha alavuku peelings varum.. unmaya sollu.. yaaru athu..?
Folks...!
Thanks for ur comments. I wish to make one thing clear...
A poem may not necessarily be written based on true experiences alone. My poem is powered only by imagination. If it sounds like a real experience, then I should consider it as a compliment. Thanks anyways...
The idea and theme gets at full 10.
but the poem was not bad.......
I dont know much about poems,but
after the 3rd stanza, u cud hav done a bit better with the flow i guess.....
i want to c more poems from you dhaa.it was interesting...
looks like its ur output out of YOUR experience...aena love failure paaru..addan ;-)
hey good one da !!!
i accept ur point that u dont have to xperience it to write abt it, but if u dont mind can u let know ur visitors wat was ur source of inspiration :)
GOOD WORK...
Keep blooming with new ones..
It gets better when u go on.
nice..
who is that girl?
Fabulous work.!!!!!It doesn't look like ur first poem...written with a lot of feeling....Keep up the good work!!!!!
Wow.its so realistic!!!!
ithu friendship poem ah ila love pathi ah....????
un imagination ae ipadi na ,apuram ne experience panni eluthina epadi irukum.yosichu parkaren..ha ha.waiting for that poem..... ;)...expecting more poems from u.
Hi Gowri,
ennamo po...frindship pathi eluthuna ..ipa love pati poem vera..kalkura...very nice poem
but u r hidind the truth.yarunu sola matra...fine ...keep up the gud wrk...this poems really touches the heart...
-abi
Hey!
Is this about your pet dog that you missed ??
R u going to be a pet doggy to some one else ?????????????????
anyhow enjoy it !!
Love is like swimming in the sky!!
If Flying is felicitous
& Falling Hurts!
Take a deep breath before you swim!!
FORCE BE WITH YOU,
`PREM
Sir i know you would have been in love with someone! I dont think its possible for a guy to write like this without prior experience!!
gounder style "mapu, who is d gurlz?"
Dha that waaz an AWESOME one!!!! seriously wen reading other's comments am RaIsEd wit a doubtttt....
Whooooz Taat Guuurrrllll ????? ;)
* Bt seriously *
** SooopER KooooL **
its high time to confess....gowri
Dude i donno wat to say.. knowing u dont think this is real.. must be fiction but again i have to consider the weight of so many responses.. first of all the poem was nice.. u'll get better as u write..thats how i feel it is when it comes to poems.. now i have to take the liberty of playin to the gallery as well, so i ask u " who is that girl who forced u to write this poem?"
thATS a really nice one....
enjoyed reading that....!!! :)
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